I have a request to all of youposted Nov 6th 2009, 4:34PM
Mood: Blah
I need make my writing even better. I need more detail and description in them. i also need less dialogue, i use it way too much.
if any of you reading my stories notice something else i'm doing wrong or anything at fault with my stories, please tell me.
i need you to tell me these things so i can become a better writer
remember if you notice anything at all be sure to tell me
on top of that i'm tired of all my stories coming out more like scripts than actual stories.
normally i try to let you, the readers make up your own scenery and worlds for the stories to take place in. the only problem with that is that i want to be my own world, not yours.
if you have any of you have objections to this decision let me know.
Hey guys,
Real name: David
Birth day: October 24, 1991
i'm an anime fan just like my brother and friend, they both joined and thought i might try it out. Keldorix is the name of the main character in a story i started writing. EGL4 is my twin brother and mk737 is one of my friends. I'm sort of a nerd. I'm a huge Sony fan. I'm a highschool student, 10th grade, I live in West Milford New Jersey. Some of my friends call me evil but you'll never know why(i don't even know). Sorry, i don't draw that much so i'm not much of an artist. I'm a huge fan of Naruto, Death Note, and Bleach. I really enjoy reading Megatokyo. My favorite author is probably Marcus Sedgewick. I really like Final Fantasy VII and any games related to it, like Dirge of Cerberus.
Other favorite games: .Hack//G.U.(All) Devil May Cry(2,3&4) Megaman Zero(4) Megaman X(5)
I can also be found on:
http://www.gaiaonline.com/profiles/13342471
Outer Heaven operative: Crimson Jaguar
specialty: close quarters combat, any weapon. (most proficient with blades)
I have to say you're a talented writer. If you don't mind a little criticism?
From what I've read so far I've noticed that your stories are far more dialog-based than detail-based.
There's nothing truly wrong with that, but detail is always a very welcome addition to stories. Not only does it help the reader better understand some things, it also help them picture the environment and setting that your characters are in. Details can also be used to hide clues or hints to what may be coming next.
But most of all, it makes your stories more than just text. You can create entire worlds for the reader to immerse themselves in. People will be able to read your work, and feel like they're actually watching it instead. Detail helps create emotion and feeling.
So rather than just a few descriptions here and there, try really delving into your imagined world. If you do, your readers will too, guaranteed.
Regardless, I still love your stuff, and as a fellow writer, I encourage you to read mine. You might like it.
i've been trying to fix that. i hate reading my things and noticing how terrible it is with detail.
i try to let the reader imagine their own world and that's good and bad i guess. i want it to be MY world. not theirs. thanks for pointing that out to me.
sure man, i'll read your stuff when i've got a little more time.
Getting over my cold I think... although my dad and brother have it now. And waiting anxiously for tomorrow, also hoping my boyfriend got over HIS cold. ^^' other than that I'm doing great!
Thanks. Yeah totally but I think I'd rather be the first to get it. Ah because I miss my friends and especially boyfriend of course -feels stupid-. That would be good if he was 8D
What game? Yeah sleep... I've talked to Ed about that one... seems we agreed that no matter how much sleep you get, you still want more.
hey Meg, long time no see. i've been doing pretty good, not much has happened. but i did get a car, my brother and i are sharing. we got our provisional licenses.
I'm really glad to hear it!! Did you get the kind of car you wanted? I hope things are going well.
I'm alright, a little stressed. I'm missing a book and a spiral for a couple of my classes, but I've promised myself that things will get better from here out.
yep, we decided to share because it's half price for everything. it makes it so much easier, for now anyway, when we get jobs it's gonna be so much more annoying.
i want to work at gamestop but it's too hard to get to. so i guess i have to apply at "The Good Time Grill" it's an awesome restaurant near our house, it's supposed to be like a dinner from the 50's
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